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Youth

Youth

Saudi Arabia

February 2, 2010

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Hi again Smile. This is the first poem I ever wrote. It might not be a POEM, but it was a trying after all.

I welcome any suggestion Innocent

When the sky opens its eye,
There are no clouds that fly.
Nor dark nor baby cry
But a space is between us, I sigh.

I still remember that land
WHere you did touch my hand.
THen stopped to give sound,
That love did start from underground.

I want to break the gray
And to begin then a new day
When the brave beats stop to say
I will love you for every day.

I have a crush only on you
I hope you feel the same way I do.

'cause everywhere to me
When I close my eyes and see
Your soul feeds mine and tells me
We will meet again under the tree.

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Hope you like it, and hope to read your comments on my new entry Embarassed

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02:44 AM Feb 05 2010

Youth

Youth
Saudi Arabia

Your rosy words embarassed me Embarassed

thanx for being here, honey (:

04:46 PM Feb 04 2010

))~~#~~RO$E~~%~~((
Saudi Arabia

Really,is this ur first attempt??w000w very nice poetic words!!! no dear this is a poem and a very nice one as well~ keep going,we r waiting 4 more:)

04:19 AM Feb 04 2010

Youth

Youth
Saudi Arabia

you have no idea what your words have done to me.

I've never recieved such  supporting ever .

thanx for every thing. Embarassed

11:25 PM Feb 03 2010

Amar pandey
India

As beginner,  you did really very well. As far as I know about poetry, It is artistic way to present emotions and feelings. I can say that you have succeeded to do that. Well done. keep it up.   

11:20 AM Feb 03 2010

Youth

Youth
Saudi Arabia

To handwriter:

I can't express how I feel toward your comment.

I really appreciate it. thanx for pushing me forward. Smile

11:12 AM Feb 03 2010

Youth

Youth
Saudi Arabia

To East-Bird:

thanx for droping in. Smile

I never thought that you guys would like it.

That feeling is awsome. thanks again.

11:08 AM Feb 03 2010

Youth

Youth
Saudi Arabia

To Chabowbo:

its a good idea. I know a friend who has achieved the native-speaker competence from listening to songs.

thanx, dear for being in my blog.

11:03 AM Feb 03 2010

Youth

Youth
Saudi Arabia

To Omar911:

thanx for supporting me Smile

I expected you to be the first one to comment on my poem, and you didn't let me down.

thanx again

07:13 PM Feb 02 2010

handwriter

handwriter
Norway

Yes, very nice and very poetic.  Good job.  It all has good timing, rhythm and makes sense.  Yes, very good.  I hope that you will grace with more.

 

Take care,

doni

07:10 PM Feb 02 2010

East-Bird

East-Bird
Saudi Arabia

wow!

As a first attempt. It's more than awesome. I even thought it's not ur first one.Well done and keep going on.

06:34 PM Feb 02 2010

chabowbo

chabowbo
Thailand

wow

i like english love poem.

it's easy to understand and remember.

My institutions teaching english from song.

01:59 PM Feb 02 2010

OMAR911

OMAR911
Saudi Arabia

nice words

keep going Cool